Thesis Statement

ENG 102
Thesis Statements
Tim O’Brien

Identify the weak thesis statement:

1.I’m going to write about Darwin’s concerns with evolution in The Origin of the Species.

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3.Darwin’s concern with survival of the fittest in The Origin of the Species leads him to neglect a potentially conflicting aspect of his theory of evolution-survival as a matter of interdependence.

An important part of one’s college education is learning to better understand others’ points of view.

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4.Although an important part of one’s college education is learning to better understand others’ points of view a persistent danger is that the students will simply be required to substitute the teacher’s answers for the ones they grew up uncritically believing.

By inventing terms, such as “loose fit” and “relaxed fit”, the jean industry has attempted to normalize, even glorify, its product for an older and fatter generation.

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2.The jeans industry targets its advertisements to appeal to young adults.

Othello is a play about love and jealousy.

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5. Although Othello appears to attack jealousy, it also supports the skepticism of the jealous characters over the naïvete of the lovers.

The songs of the punk rock group Minor Threat relate to the Feelings of individuals who dare to be different. Their songs are just composed of pure emotion. Pure emotion is very important in music, because it serves as a vehicle to convey the important message of individuality. Minor Threat’s songs are meaningful to me because I can identify with them.
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The punk rock group Minor Threat uses emotional lyrics to appeal to their target audience, which considers itself individualistic and therefore the lyrics must convey a message of individuality.


My Chosen Sentence: I chose the sentence; “I’m going to write about Darwin’s concerns with evolution in The Origin of the Species.” Right away we already know what we are reading in your paper, so there is no need to explain what you are about to write about again. A thesis statement needs to have detail about the subject and an argument able theory to back it up. A thesis is the way to set up your paper to allow the reader an insight of your opinions as well as the facts that are in the story. This allows the reader to have their own judgments and then compare them to the writer’s.
My Thesis Statement: Among the many short stories that O’Brien gives us as readers, he shows you in mind and emotions what it is like out there fighting that war. Each page you read keeps you wanting more and at the same time you feel like you are on that battle field with him, you just want to put the book aside. He allows you to go into the depths of a true war story and truths behind each of these stories.

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